Overall I think this workshop experience went pretty well.  It was definitely very helpful to hear the feedback from everyone in regards to what could be changed/altered to make the story more impactful.  I really appreciated the honesty I got from a few of my peers in regards to what kind of took them out of the story.  I feel like I should have made Harrison either have less friends, or have him explain to Bree that this is how he used to feel.  If I were to revise this story, which I feel like is not where I am leaning towards right now, I would include more about Carmen and how she came about.  I would also develop Harrison a little bit in the sense of how he found his way.  In the end, I really felt like this workshop was very beneficial in the development of this story.